This analysis of a Wikinews story aims to improve the content of this news which is called “Florida school shooting suspect faces death penalty, appears silent in Court”.
The first thing the news needs to improve is the unclear timeline. “When” as one of the important component of the news story needs to tell in the first sentence. In this news, the writer used “this Wednesday” instead of specific day in the first sentence, it will mislead readers in some instance.
Image: the first paragraph of the news
- The news lacked enough links which are helpful for readers to acquire more information. The third paragraph of the news is the brief of the story, it can link to the shooting video or the whole news. ex: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=WeXOXeJHRqc&t=5534s
- The news can add more images such as the photo of the victim or the photo that the suspect in court. It can make the news more abundant.
The most obvious merit of Wikinews is allowed everyone to edit and supplement the news, however, there was no space for public to publish the comments.
Between the news story and the headline, it existed more than 200 words introduction about Wikinews writing principles. It occupied a large page and diverted the readers’ attention from the news.
Image: Wikinews writing principles